4 ความคิดเห็น

1. Kamonrat Che(5110363024) on 20 กุมภาพันธ์ 2553 เวลา 23:24

   Part1
   
   1.”Reduce lead pollution in air travel due” I like this sentence because air pollution is bad air for everything now. Reduce pollution is good idea.
   2. You want to say about your goal in life.
   3. You should use listing order signals (first of all, next, then, finally) in your reasons.
   4. Your story is good organizational and interesting story.
   5. You check verb in first sentence. Your story is future. You do not start sentence with “are” ( Last sentence).
   Part2
   
   1.c=3
   2.o=3
   3.v=2
   4.g=2
   5.s=3

    
2. 5110363396 on 26 กุมภาพันธ์ 2553 เวลา 07:31

   Part 1
   
   1. I like this story because it offers the goal of a good life.
   
   2.Goal Of My Life
   
   3.You should give reasons related to topics such as why you are more to choose the software business is a goal of life.
   
   4.You should use the listing order instead of numbers.
   
   5.The word "Are" capitalization is wrong.
   
   part 2
   
   C = 2,O = 2 ,V = 2,G = 2,S = 3

    
3. DAWAN ( 5110363123) on 26 กุมภาพันธ์ 2553 เวลา 13:09

   Part 1:
   
   1.Your writing is good. I like ideas in the business software and network.
   Because the current internet is very important in everyday life.
   2.You want to describe your goal in life.
   3. You should use listing order signals in your writing.
   Concluding sentence should conclude all describe and don’t add content beyond that you describe.
   4. Check how to use comma in a complex sentence..Try to combine simple sentence to compound sentence because it will make your paragraph more interesting.
   5. Check grammatical error and verb in some the sentences.
   - You check in first sentence. Delete the word “ to have”.
   
   
   Part 2:
   
   C = 2
   O = 2
   V = 3
   G = 2
   S = 3

    
4. Nattakan Ch.E. (5110363073) on 26 กุมภาพันธ์ 2553 เวลา 19:59

   Part 1:
   1. Your paragraph is well-organized. I like this paragraph because it express the goal in the future, and it is a useful goal of our world.
   2. Writer want to describe about the goal in your life.
   3. You use transition signals such as First, Second, Third, In addition, and Next to tell your reader that these are main points.
   4. You should check commas in compound sentences and grammartical errors better than this. In paragraph, you can use transition signal in part of reason.
   5. The first sentence “My goal in life is to have founded the business software and network” I think that it should be “My goal in life is the business software and network”
   In the reasons, you should be used transition signal rather number such as “First, business is business software and network management tht events can easily fast.”
   Concluding sentence, you should be used “In summary”
   The last sentence is complex sentence, but you don’t put camma behind a dependent clause. It should be “When the market demands, business will grow”
   
   Part 2:
   C = 2
   O = 3
   V = 3
   G = 2
   S = 3